In the dark room
I was alone
With my bloody dream
Had it
In the dark
Lost my love
Lost my hope
In my dream
My bloody dream
He was there
Laughing
And died laughing
I was there
Crying
And fainted crying
In my bloody dream
Today I in the dark room
Alone
With my bloody dream
13 comments:
Has the little girl grown up so much??
Wake up girlie its only a dreamy the world is sunny and nice outside. :)
So good to see her writing poems. Maa ka asar hai !
Wishing you all the best, Rasanmeet. Read a lot, scribble away when and where the inspiration strikes you . Even in dreams. Keep notes. You will be grateful for these notes later.
Keep writing !
MW
TBC
Such a scary dream! I'm sure you were happy when you woke up and realised that it was only a dream.
Keep writing- you have a flair.
It is a coincidence that the background of my blog too is the same. i felt I am viewing my own blog. You are courageous to make experiments in writing. I feel happy for you. Do it , experiment and experiment with your full vigour.I will like you to come out and be a keen observer. You are able to say a lot in a few words, so do pick up more from the environ and sum it up with your poetic sense. Be blessed and I will look forward to your more poems on this blog which I will keep following.Jinde raho Lambiyaan umraan.
One word- 'marvelous'. What has astounded me most is, how can a child of 13 write like this? But no, my estimation of this poem is not due to this age factor, rather due to its own merit. The images are so intense, the moments so dark, and the feelings so strong! Even with lines expressing hopelessness, this poet has made me hope for her shining future, as a human, as a human poet. Blessings and Love.
Are u kidding. Such a mature poem by such a kiddo!!! Talented daughter of a superbly talented mom :) Keep rockin kiddo
amazing for a 13 year. teen years are the begining of an era in once's life, but so mature ?. amazing
Though the poem has a sad backdrop but it all the more reflects the depth of thought process and the level of maturity of Rasanmeet which is way ahead of her tender age. She will certaily surpass her all rounder mother. Wish her all the best.
keep dreaming..keep writing....
good luck
jupinder
Very nice, a great beginning, do keep it up :)- Gurpreet.
Dear Rasanmeet -
This was an excellent poem! You do have a knack for writing! I just love to see how you are excelling in life. The running and now the writing. I am sure your parents are very proud of you! Keep up the good work - what I have learned in life is: hard work never goes to waste and if there is a will, there is a way! I can't wait to instill all of these beliefs in my dear little Manreet. I want to empower her to be the best and never to feel that she can't achieve anything. God Bless you!
Keep up the good work,
Sukh
Even at the cost of repeating, I must say it's way too 'mature' poem. The words are laden with emotion and meaning. I'm really surprised and proud too. Way to go, NewPinch. Present us more word-pictures of your thoughts and experience.
very graphic.. keep writing!
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